I think I'll go without quotes for the big post.
Concerning Larson getting sole credit for this episode, it's very likely some quirk of union rules, nothing more.
I enjoyed seeing Starlight play a large role in an episode without her actually being a major driver of the story, outside of the book copying part that could have been handled without her. Sure, most of it was stuff Spike could have done, but it's sort of like seeing a different actor play the same role and putting their own twist on the lines. Take the part where she confronts one of the ponies pestering Fluttershy, and she casually lifts him up with magic, which freaks him out enough that he silently flees. The same lines could have been said by Spike, but this small moment quickly demonstrates the difference in their characters and how others perceive them. I was fine with the episode cutting away from her talking to those ponies at the restaurant, since it would have been funnier if what she did was left unseen, but it was undermined by them appearing later. Starlight was also very useful as a character that the fans could safely ignore, since she wouldn't be mentioned at all in the Journal.
On the subject of the song not matching up with the rest of the episode, I don't think that's quite right. Remove all the fan references that muddle the mixture, and you're left with the following: ponies consider Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, and Applejack perfect, and consider Fluttershy and Rarity to be terrible ponies that shouldn't have been in the book. That is to say, they're ignoring all the flaws of the former, and laser focusing on the flaws of the latter.
During the mob scene before the song, they're mostly about questioning why flawed characters are included in the journal. Fans of one character see them as the best and everyone else as the worst. That reporter pony asks Twilight how they can all possibly be friends, and he's implying this is because some of them are too flawed.
That's where the song comes in, with Twilight pointing out that none of them are perfect and all of them have flaws, and none of them are bad because of that. The meta stuff distracts from all that, though, which is why it seems to come out of nowhere.
All in all, I strongly suspect that the fandom jokes were added in on top of a story about looking past and exaggerating flaws, and they didn't think too strongly about how it all came together. I'm sure the idea was to include a few shout outs to get a laugh out of fans, and they failed to realize fans would interpret the episode as speaking out against them. Once you accept that they didn't really mean anything by it, the episode becomes much easier to parse, I find. Particularly regarding Applejack's popularity and Rarity's lack of it.
About the other characters, though I was a bit disappointed that the episode didn't go too much into how other ponies viewed Twilight, I enjoyed how her conflict was based mainly on empathy toward her friends. She was in pain because her friends were. The scene at the beginning with the fillies reminded me a lot of the Cadance flashback from the first part of "A Canterlot Wedding", where she used her love to rekindle the love between two arguing ponies, and serves to demonstrate that yes, she is the princess of friendship now.
With Twilight blaming herself for her friends' problems, it will be a huge shame if they don't follow up on it in another episode. Perhaps in the season finale, Twilight decides to continue writing about the lessons she and her friends learned, having encountered more people that got the right idea and realizing that her song did break through to some of the people in the mob.
I adored the way Fluttershy was handled here. When confronted by angry fans, she cowers, yes, but that's because while she has learned to be less of a doormat, it's still something that takes effort on her part. She was taken by surprise and confused, but once she was able to get her bearings, she was able to stand up for herself perfectly well. And then in the castle, she openly displayed her anger and frustration in front of her friends, showing a level of comfort we didn't see in episodes like "Putting Your Hoof Down" in season 2. I remember that for the longest time, people were saying that they couldn't have Fluttershy not be shy, because then she wouldn't have a character. Seasons 6 and 7 have done a spectacular job demonstrating what Fluttershy is like after coming out of her shell, where she's clearly the same character that prefers to be kind and gentle, but is more comfortable showing her real emotions around her friends, and can be assertive in a safe way.
Rarity was indeed hilarious, and I loved the emphasis on how much her dressmaking reflects her emotional state. Pinkie, Applejack, and Rainbow were alright. There was just more interesting stuff to be mined from characters reacting to others hating them, rather than loving them too much.
About the song, three of the four songs so far have been hits with fans, so I think they have a pretty good track record this season.
Threw in some pictures in the post to make it look more fancy. Feedback (Not just on the opinions but also formatting, structure, actual writing stuff) would be cool since I want to do more of this stuff seriously in the future. Not 100% happy with it but I just kinda wanted to be done with it.
Checked out the two EQG shorts. The Pinkie one was kinda eh aside from the shipping. The Shake one was not that good either. Honestly the show's music sets the bar way too high so all of these short music videos they're doing have to survive largely on the visuals because most of them just don't sound good, and I didn't care for the visuals in the video. (Although to be fair those kinds of shakes gross me out so that's a large part why)
EDIT: There was apparently a music panel at Bronycon where an unreleased verse of We'll Make our Mark was released where Diamond Tiara sung but was cut out of the final version for time constraints. You can check the panel footage with the song
here
In terms of content, for certain subjects, you overexplain things. Take paragraph 4, which could be cut down to this:
For the intent I think it's fairly obvious. Starlight Glimmer has been a character that the writers have been trying to push ever since her reformation a season ago. However I feel like the biggest problem she had in season 6 was that she was either the center of attention or almost entirely absent. Because of this she doesn't really feel like she's part of the group to me. What I believe is the best course of action for her is to try and integrate her into the group so she can work together with them narratively speaking rather then competing. And the best way of doing that is by having her play more supporting roles in episodes, especially ones with characters that she hasn't really had a whole lot of interactions with [which season 7 has already demonstrated].
I cut out sentences where you said the same thing in a different way, or in the case of this being "a troubling precedent", removed an idea that you didn't explore. Note that I didn't change the sentences themselves, except that part I added to the last one, so it perhaps doesn't flow well now.
The only big issue I found with your post was word sprawl, and you can combat it by letting it sit for a while, coming back, and going, "Did I really need that sentence to demonstrate this thought? Should I bring up this idea if I don't explore it?" etc.
Granted, I'm probably guilty of this in my own posts, but an analysis like that is a different sort of content.
Concerning the EQG music videos, a big part of why they don't feel as good and memorable is that there isn't any real emotion or meaning attached to them. Compare to another music video, "Friendship Through the Ages", which was meant to be hopeful, and demonstrated Sunset being accepted into the group. These new ones all just seem like songs for the sake of having songs. I just realized, did Ingram really have time to make all these extra one-off songs with the movie and the show? Do we know for sure he actually wrote them?
About the cut "We'll Make Our Mark" verse, it's nice to hear, but I can see why they removed it. Diamond Tiara just had a solo song, and her feelings about the situation were quite clear from the scene leading into this one. While I did find it odd that she basically disappeared once the song started, I think this is giving her too much focus. Plus, the final song follows the rule of three, with three distinct sections: the CMC singing while marching through town, their "sisters" at the cutecenera, and the CMC singing again at the meeting. Having four sections doesn't feel right. Unless she sang
instead of the sisters, in which case, I'm really glad her part was removed.
Time constraints... sure.
And Diamond Tiara was never heard from again.
I miss that little filly. She must have been killed off-screen or something.
Can't they give her an adventure with Starlight Glimmer or Silver Spoon or Derpy or something. Cripes.
That was one hell of a great episode and yet it pretty much stands out as character assassination as she was reduced to complete irrelevancy.
"Oh, you can't be trotted out as an antagonist any more? Well, you're completely useless to us now. Have a good life. Your friends, The MLP Friendship is Magic writer's room."
I really hope she ends up playing a large role in "Marks and Recreations" later this season. It's still baffling that
her mother had a much larger role last season than her.
This episode was all over the place thematically. At first I thought they might be going for a "once a creative work is in the wild you don't have control of it anymore; you gotta let it go" lesson, but they went with... something different. It's kind of difficult to extract any kind of meaning to it, since the climactic song addresses basically the criticism Flittershybhas gotten and no one else. There's just no cohesion between the ways that the book affects their lives, as we go from biting criticism to uberpopularity to stalkers and the like.
Good thing the song is amazing. It might just be the afterglow, but I think it might be the best the series has ever had. (Something in the cadence reminded ow my punk, particularly Bad Religion, but I'm not sure why). You even forget for the length of it that they're not actually addressing the episode's main conflict.
My feelings on the first part are in the first part of this post.
And yes, the song is great.