My day as a tattoo artist with an opinionated brain:
Good grief. What an awkwardly worded statement she had put on your chest forever...
"Love is that dear octopus whose tentacles we never quite escape nor does our inner most hearts wish to"
Poetry eh? Bit of an awkward mouthful...
- 'dear octopus'? Really?
- 'quite' seems a little unnecessary here. Maybe.
- we can tighten this first part of this up a bit
"Love is the octopus whose tentacles we never quite escape."
-eh, 'quite' works ok after all. Not a bad sentence there
-that's a real mess after it though.
"Nor does our inner most hearts wish to"
- probably use neither instead of nor...
- innermost is one word.
- ending it in a preposition to make it sound 'more smarter' is kinda uneffective, yanno?
Yeah, tell you what- lets just scrap the last bit of added in garbage and stick with the one solid sentence, avoid an ugly text wall that nobody will ever want to read and add a cool deep sea visual-
Maybe of actual tentacles wrapping around the words, like trying to drag them down.... into your cleavage. You really want this on your sternum? Okaaaay....or maybe a heart or something and not your.... shit poetry...
FINE GO GET THE METH-HEAD TWO BLOCKS OVER TO DO IT. YOUR SENTIMENT SUCKS ANYWAY.