Ahhh, that's a great way to descibe it. So you think I have to build the tension more when she's starting to see the signs that something is up? It does feel far too sudden as it is.
And yeah, I think you're right about the solar flares. I wanted a way to visually show that something was wrong so I figured the outside being charred would make sense, but now that you mention it that really... doesn't make any sense at all. I also feel like it kind of telegraphs what's about to happen a bit too much. I can probably just take that stuff out and expand on the bit about the two tethers that are floating free.
As for the watch vs alarm clock thing, I guess it was just an oversight on her part. The real reason; I honestly just suck at beginning and endings, so I figured starting in the morning would make sense and I liked the idea of that scene. In hindsight it does seem a bit silly that she didn't bring one in the first place (I'm sure any real astronaut would just shake their head and laugh at the stupidity of it), but I'm gonna keep it just because I think it's a decent way to introduce those two characters. I could always write in a line where Yuri asks her whey she would even bring an alarm clock if it's bigger and heavier, and she says something about making it feel more like home (or something along those lines).
Thanks so much for taking the time to read it, I really appreciate it!
Ahh, and good catch on the Nostromo thing. I knew I was forgetting something! Alien: Isolation was the one that was on a station.
