Oh nice, you're reading it! What do you think?
I find the constant last name basis kinda jarring since they're not that way in the game, but otherwise it's really solid so far! I really like how much it adds to the characters. Main guy is a little less dorky than I'd imagined while playing, but I'm not one to wring my hands over depictions of silent protags differing from how I made them up in my head.
Mark is stanning something fierce for Maki, though, haha.